i like the colors, the font, the background - very expressive of the sentiment. i don't like that i cannot finish reading the background words. i liked the beginning, but then it became too difficult to read i think because of the colors - or dod you change fonts too? i suppose it is fitting that the further down you go the harder it is the read - just like breathing. in that way the background writing also emulates the sentiments which may be just what you were going for and if so kudos to you because it works/ed. still, i'd like to read the rest.
I agree with jewel. The color, the font, the words are great. The harder to read/breathe analogy is also fantastic. One thing I did notice, jewel, is that the poetry repeats. If you can read the first four sentences, you have read it all. And to be honest, I love the effect that gives the piece. Almost like it's an automatic radio call for help that keeps rebroadcasting. Chilling effect, imho.
I saw how the graphic had that perfect ambience - and I had to write something for it. It was - as you both have said - foreboding - chilling - supposed to reflect the desperation of suffocation.
Nice of you to say... It's funny how the universe works - a few weeks ago i found myself reading "A Grief Ago" and I thought - "I should spend more time with Mr. Thomas."
Wednesday, September 29, 2010 at 8:20AM
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Bravo, once again, fine sir.
Thanks for the feedback...
(don't worry, Cannibal - you shall rise again)
Nice of you to say... It's funny how the universe works - a few weeks ago i found myself reading "A Grief Ago" and I thought - "I should spend more time with Mr. Thomas."
And here you are...